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Side note: Tried redeeming myself with perspective; and since I don't know how to do perspective it was all drawn from mind. Luckily, I think I did an alright job on the birds eye view; at least it doesn't look too awfully like he's a midget or something... Anyway, he has finally come back to civilization, and that's where an entire story that I have thought out occurs. This is more of a pilot and an experiment. I'd like to thank all my friends for their support and ideas, including Kearin (doesn't want real name I suppose here). Thanks for taking a look everyone!!
Well, FINALLY got around to posting something. I recently finished a project/experiment, and although it didn't turn out as deep or meaningful as I had originally wanted it was a fun thing to work on.
The story focuses on a man with thanophobia; a deep fear of death. As everyone whose ever existed has some sort of fear of dying, I took this concept. Plus, my own personal fears of not existing are there too.
Jon is visited by the psych pomp of Death; which looks as Jon would interpret Death, as it has no actual physical form. Being in the west, he see's it as the typical Grim Reaper; however the antlers/horns and twisted face are meant to represent changes in life and how no matter what you do you will end up at the same point. Death is inevitable, after all.
Honestly, this was a real challenge for me; I suck at perspective and the story itself is rushed. Still, I really liked a lot of scenes; my favorites being a toss up between page 4 and page 7. Trust me, the art at the very least gets better as it goes. Less messy too.
A lot of the concepts drawn were merely ascetic pleasures; but I tried to stick to a theme in it (what with the branching patterns). You'll note that it has not been edited at all digitally; all done with a normal pencil and paper. I might ink it, as my first inking project, but I don't know if it'd look too good inked.
I am proud that I actually was able to write a script, and finish it in due time (err...well, 4 months from start to finish). It was one of those off and on projects, especially with school and all these other things in life.
I hope you enjoy it, and please leave me some feedback of what you think! ANY criticism or moral boosts or whatever
-Noah
Pg-1 [link]
Pg-2 [link]
Pg-3 [link]
Pg-4 [link]
Pg-5 [link]
Pg-6 [link]
Pg-7 [link]
Pg-8 [link]
pg-9 [link]
Well, FINALLY got around to posting something. I recently finished a project/experiment, and although it didn't turn out as deep or meaningful as I had originally wanted it was a fun thing to work on.
The story focuses on a man with thanophobia; a deep fear of death. As everyone whose ever existed has some sort of fear of dying, I took this concept. Plus, my own personal fears of not existing are there too.
Jon is visited by the psych pomp of Death; which looks as Jon would interpret Death, as it has no actual physical form. Being in the west, he see's it as the typical Grim Reaper; however the antlers/horns and twisted face are meant to represent changes in life and how no matter what you do you will end up at the same point. Death is inevitable, after all.
Honestly, this was a real challenge for me; I suck at perspective and the story itself is rushed. Still, I really liked a lot of scenes; my favorites being a toss up between page 4 and page 7. Trust me, the art at the very least gets better as it goes. Less messy too.
A lot of the concepts drawn were merely ascetic pleasures; but I tried to stick to a theme in it (what with the branching patterns). You'll note that it has not been edited at all digitally; all done with a normal pencil and paper. I might ink it, as my first inking project, but I don't know if it'd look too good inked.
I am proud that I actually was able to write a script, and finish it in due time (err...well, 4 months from start to finish). It was one of those off and on projects, especially with school and all these other things in life.
I hope you enjoy it, and please leave me some feedback of what you think! ANY criticism or moral boosts or whatever
-Noah
Pg-1 [link]
Pg-2 [link]
Pg-3 [link]
Pg-4 [link]
Pg-5 [link]
Pg-6 [link]
Pg-7 [link]
Pg-8 [link]
pg-9 [link]
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S'been a while.
Well, you know me. I'm gonna give it to you straight. But remember, I'm telling you this cause I think you got some serious potential.
You've improved with your anatomy. I like the more realistic approach and the shading and atmosphere is pretty good too. I like how you got some perspective going on. Your hands are really good. I think you've surpassed me in terms of drawing ability. But that doesn't mean that I still can't critique on stuff.
However, if there's one thing I find iffy is that it feels too staticy. For example on page 4. It doesn't seem like Death is POPPING OUT! It just looks like he's there. For something like horror you gotta have the shock factor. Try to make it more dynamic and showy. Put some speed lines and try to draw in motions.
Other things like panel lay out. There are momments where I feel that it would be better to separate Death and the Main Character into two seperate panels instead of shoving them into the same panel. Which brings me to my next point.
There's not much focus on your main character. I think it's cause you enjoy drawing death, but I don't feel sympathy for the guy. Also, when you have Death and Jon in the same panel there's more focus towards Death, I think it's cause you like drawing him more and you draw him first but Jon is kinda over shadowed by Death. Even if I see his reactions, they seem like background. It all seemed like more of Death's story than Jon's story.
Also, try drawing more reaction panels. Make Jon afraid, show the reader what he's thinking. I like death, he has a bit of personality but Jon seems like your emotionless sort of fellow and it's hard for me to want to care about the dude.
At any rate this is my opinion. And don't expect any criticism from DA. I gave up on that a long time ago. Moral boost maybe but it's just people praising your work with no real substance. You got promise kid. (Yes I get to call you kid now)
Well, you know me. I'm gonna give it to you straight. But remember, I'm telling you this cause I think you got some serious potential.
You've improved with your anatomy. I like the more realistic approach and the shading and atmosphere is pretty good too. I like how you got some perspective going on. Your hands are really good. I think you've surpassed me in terms of drawing ability. But that doesn't mean that I still can't critique on stuff.
However, if there's one thing I find iffy is that it feels too staticy. For example on page 4. It doesn't seem like Death is POPPING OUT! It just looks like he's there. For something like horror you gotta have the shock factor. Try to make it more dynamic and showy. Put some speed lines and try to draw in motions.
Other things like panel lay out. There are momments where I feel that it would be better to separate Death and the Main Character into two seperate panels instead of shoving them into the same panel. Which brings me to my next point.
There's not much focus on your main character. I think it's cause you enjoy drawing death, but I don't feel sympathy for the guy. Also, when you have Death and Jon in the same panel there's more focus towards Death, I think it's cause you like drawing him more and you draw him first but Jon is kinda over shadowed by Death. Even if I see his reactions, they seem like background. It all seemed like more of Death's story than Jon's story.
Also, try drawing more reaction panels. Make Jon afraid, show the reader what he's thinking. I like death, he has a bit of personality but Jon seems like your emotionless sort of fellow and it's hard for me to want to care about the dude.
At any rate this is my opinion. And don't expect any criticism from DA. I gave up on that a long time ago. Moral boost maybe but it's just people praising your work with no real substance. You got promise kid. (Yes I get to call you kid now)